Is it necessary to also give him your identity as Odin?
Tybalt stalker! Maybe he was just looking for her because of the way she went missing? I could bring this up later, but: unlike the anime, Tybalt doesn't get an episode to himself and his place in Juliet's arc. I refer to the first half or so of the anime, although I think the same is true for how his backstory is handled after that first half. For example, we don't learn that he has a network of information. We'll later learn that he knows the priest is a spy for the police, but as he'll point that out to Juliet in the bar, we don't know how he knows it.
What does Curio mean, 'suddenly jumping into the fray'? That's how Juliet always seems to me at the beginning. Wait, he is kind of right in that usually she wears her costume and such.
Suddenly Tybalt! Like his last appearance, we have to infer that he somehow knows what's going on with the Red Whirlwind, whether through the network of information the manga doesn't establish for him or just hearsay, since it is a commotion.
Romeo's name is different too. Candolebonte as opposed to Candore Van.
Tybalt is still condescending in this version. I have to wonder how much of it is his personality and how much of it is not knowing how to be blunt while also trying to 'win' the conversation (I mean come out on top, make himself sound superior to somehow lend authority to his statement, as people sometimes including me often do in real life). I prefer to think he's just not a people person and is always annoyed with having to deal with them when they do something wrong.
The Duke doesn't want to reverse martial law even though the stated objective has been accomplished.
Of course he's symbolic. Lancelot is a grown man man who knew what he was doing. He had already been arrested and is still suspected of being with the Whirlwind, he wants to reverse the martial law, and he wants to protect Juliet and the people. So, like in the anime, he feels this is the best choice, especially since he was a marked man. Not Juliet's fault at all. I mean, what, is she supposed to only resist the Duke in the ways Conrad or Curio or Francisco or Tybalt approve? Because those will never have bad consequences and the Duke would just give up in the face of their actions? Please.
Also, apparently there is some early foreshadowing here for the tree problem. Earlier Romeo or Portia mentions fog showing up more frequently. Last chapter. Lancelot asks Juliet in his letter to clear up the fog. I know he means metaphorically, but that's what reminded me of the literal fog and does count as subtle foreshadowing. I don't see a scene where he figures out the Whirlwind is Juliet, though. He just meets with Conrad shortly before his death and seems to know. Obviously he did know it was Odin, since he calls out that name in Act 2. I can't remember how he figured it out in the anime either.
Why reveal your identity as a Capulet to Romeo? How does that make sense if you think he's your enemy? I guess he already knows you're the Whirlwind, so she doesn't think it matters that she's also a Capulet? But it's risky, and pretty clearly done for the drama, like when she reveals her Whirlwind identity in the anime to push him away.
As in the anime, it's not a good idea to just think you owe to to people to do what they expect from you. The guilt and the expectation cause her to agree with Conrad (who is still the one who should have know better). Although in this case, she is responsible for throwing herself at the carriage when Curio was telling her to wait. So she is more responsible than in the show. I gripe sometimes, but I do think this arc is well-written and some of the things I complain about are series flaws as well, that sort of come packaged with the kind of positives these retellings have.
We see Ophelia.
Does Conrad need to announce himself? I guess it could help distract Duke Montague from Juliet.
This time we have no scenes of Camillo (Conrad gets his information from a vassal of the Duke, and it seems the failure of the attempt is not really due to betrayal) or of Francisco going to Tybalt. We don't know if they happened or if Tybalt was just following Juliet again.
Also, way to reveal his name in front of the enemy, Juliet. Maybe he doesn''t care. He didn't cover his face and I don't know how fast things are meant to be happening.
Again he blames her, but at least this time he has more reason to do so. The fantranslation had him somewhat calmer about it, or at least restrained, as in the anime (in which he's also harsh but he says he doesn't care if she dies with the rest of them.) I remember it being "think carefully about what happened" and then agreeing when Juliet voices that it's her fault if I'm not inserting that part from the anime. Here it's:
''L-Let me go...everyone's-" "No, you're done! You don't like it? Whose fault do you think it is that they're in this mess?"
He's even drawn angrier-looking. Of course he also helps her and saves her the first time they meet, so I guess from his POV he doesn't have much to get a positive opinion on, but still. I don't know what the Japanese said or who's more accurate. It could be that this version is, if the angry eyebrows are anything to go buy, and it does set up him being an angry guy, but I still prefer a calmer Tybalt, whether he's angry inside or not, cares about her or not.
I forgot to mention this, but I just remembered that Hermione does have a tiny cameo. Just a date at her house during a party, nothing meaninful to her character. I think it was last chapter...it was! She remains a nonentity.
At least this is a good way to justify Duke Montague's getting harder on the people and stripping the Mayor of his post and noble rank. He brought proof of further unrest and could pretend the Mayor cared too much about the people to do something about it.
We get a panel of Mercutio sneering beside the other nobles at Romeo's proposal, this time to refuse the Duke's order to intensify the girl-hunts. I forgot to mention that he appears in Act 2 to agree with the Duke's commoners as grapes metaphor. I don't remember him getting much of an arc here either. In fact I think he gets less of one. If the anime wasn't long enough or just organized well enough to give proper arcs to all those characters, I wish the manga hadn't included them or at least bothered to highlight them for us in their cameos. In this case I definitely heard that it had been intended to run longer than it did, so maybe this was going to be better done. I don't think it's the writer's fault, since she says in the afterword of this book that she expressed interest after seeing the artist's rough sketches. Not that I know how the process for this manga worked out; it certainly could have been that she came up with all the slightly different plot choices and bit inclusions of the characters,or that she was definitely going to include them in a more detailed plot but got rushed in the end. She says she's responsible for the novelization, described as "entirely different."
I appreciate that Tybalt's actions in episodes 8 and 10 are squeezed into this event and chapter -to the point where there's a similarity in his description of the bar to his description of the brothel district in the anime translations- but it's ridiculous that he'd take her to kill the priest in a crowded bar, right in front of the captain of the military police! He'd notice, he'd remember, and if Tybalt killed him there'd be a barfull of people that could be bribed into saying what happened. Maybe he can bribe them too, he certainly is rich in the anime and seems to be here if I judge solely by the fact that he has the same clothes and horse, but this isn't implied or stated in the text.
He does kill the captain when he tries to off Juliet as she hesitates to slay the priest, but not the priest, unless he does that off page before he walks off at the beginning of the next act, leaving Juliet alone in this place she's unfamiliar with. Anime Tybalt is much better and comprehensible despite all the flaws in his development.
As mentioned above, the writer's afterword for volume one says she wrote a novelization that goes in a different direction. I barely remember hearing about this before. Of course I want to read the novelization, but it wasn't released in English and likely isn't available offline if I can barely remember it after looking up anything related to this anime. I wish we'd gotten more merchandise for the series available outside Japan. Maybe it wasn't popular enough?
The artist's omake are cute. Ophelia is their favorite, but she's drawn without her markings.